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So yeah that's about it. I haven't made another comic since this one but I definitely want to. I remember learning a lot immediately after finishing but 2 years later I'm recognizing even more little things I could improve on, things like some slightly confusing dialogue and compositions, backgrounds or color choices, the overall strangeness of this entire plot, etc. But I'm sure whatever I end up making next will be even better! Maybe something with Elves doing cool Elf shit. Who knows, really?

Since I'm still trying to get into the groove of making comics, any feedback at all would be REALLY appreciated! Have a good one!

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Sep 13, 2023 13:05 by Katerina C.

Very cute comic! Love how expressive the characters are, great work

Sep 13, 2023 13:20 by Jon

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

While I would love to go on an adventure, writing them is enough for me.
Sep 13, 2023 13:08 by Polina "Line" Arteev

I love your characters; they have so much personality! This was such a fun read :D


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Sep 13, 2023 13:21 by Jon

Thanks! Characters are absolutely my specialty :)

While I would love to go on an adventure, writing them is enough for me.
Dec 4, 2023 01:07 by Reanna R

I love this! The characters, the artstyle, the expressions, the story - it is all just very *chefs kiss*

May your worldbuilding hammer always fall true! Also, check out the world of the Skydwellers for lots of aerial adventures.
Dec 4, 2023 01:21 by Jon

Thanks so much!!!

While I would love to go on an adventure, writing them is enough for me.
Dec 5, 2023 14:42

This is how a skeleton SHOULD be roleplayed

Dec 5, 2023 14:49 by Jon

That's what I'm saying on GOD

While I would love to go on an adventure, writing them is enough for me.
Dec 14, 2023 16:19

Aw. This was really adorable! I enjoyed reading it and the characters are amazing. Nicely done. *thumbs up*

Dec 15, 2023 04:35 by Jon

Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it!!!

While I would love to go on an adventure, writing them is enough for me.